Once the kids turned into monsters
Once upon a time there was a little girl that had the best life ever because she lived in a castle and the castle was on a cloud. But there were servants to do everything for her and her family. SERVANTS!!!! The girl said I want a cup of tea so the servants runed to the kitchen and got the princess a cup of tea. So then after she drank her cup of tea she loved to go to her room lock her door and have
Some privacy and after she has her own privacy she always loves to go on her favourite type of airplane called the lizzie smith airplane she likes going by herself but the king always say that her big brother has to come so she can be safe. But then there was a big giant who was coming through while they were on the airplane and the big big giant STEPPED on the airplane and it crash down to land and the princess got hurt and her big brother got hurt to so the ambulance came and took both of them to the hospital. So there Mum and Dad came to see both of them but lots of people keep on taking pictures of them, asking them to take their autograph but they just runned into the hospital and went to see there kids. They were inside the room and they saw that they were turned into MONSTERS!!!! They were so shocked that their kids turned into monsters so they screamed ahhhhhhhhh what should we do said the queen maybe just….. FREAK OUT!!!!! AHHHHHHHH. So then they went back to the car and went back to the castle in the cloud. That’s the story of when the king and the queens kids turn into monsters. The end.
Hola Kylie, I really like your story of how the Queen and King’s kids turned into monsters, I thought it was really funny when they said maybe we should just freak out and then they were like, “Ahhhhhh!” That part was really funny to me. This story reminds me of the time when I fell off the pole and broke my wrist. Something that I think you could work on is to make sure you put in proper punctuation because there was no commas in your story.Do you have any connections to this story? If you do can you tell me??
ReplyDeleteHi Kylie it's Antonette from Room 8. I liked the way you had an eye catching title that will want people to read your story. Maybe next time you could add some paragraphs for a new idea. I'm excited to see more work from you Kylie!
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