Up, up and away... Descriptive Writing

For Writing in Room 5 we have been looking at descriptive writing and using our 5 senses to write a piece of Descriptive writing. This wasn't like a group writing and you have to describe using your 5 senses but what my class had to work individually. My teacher Mrs Lee gave the whole class a prompt which is like a picture that we can write about. There was a girl sitting down and a boy standing up and like putting his hands up. They were both at the top of the hill and looking at a beautiful view.

Oh wait I must have described what the prompt looks like well I hope I did. But anyways Mrs Lee my teacher told us to like write it in first person and like we are there right now so like use present words like I am and stuff like that. We were also allowed to pick a person and if you did we were allowed to talk about the other person to. We also had to come up with a descriptive title to that could hook the reader to read our Descriptive writing.

But without further to do here is my Descriptive writing:

Up, Up and Away….

Introduction

I finally see the end of the Mountain and only 3 more steps to go until I finally reached the end, I have waited 2 hours for this moment!

I’m so exhausted, so I need to sit down. I saw the view it was so beautiful, my eyes were seeing something unbelievable. I couldn’t believe my eyes but it looks like I have to, the Mountains were so tall they were touching the sky, I could see that the world was like wonderful secret place that everyone could be in. My friend Jacob saw the view as well he was amazed by it, his eyes were thinking something else but his body was thinking amazement. We both saw that everything was made by our Creator God and he made everything Perfect.

When I reached the top, I could smell the warm summer breeze touching my toes, my arms, my head and everywhere in my body. The Warm Summer breeze also made my body smell good and smell right. My friend Jacob felt the warm summer breeze go through his body and through his Mouth and the wind made him feel much better. I could also smell the Victory! Coming down on us and giving us the courage to enjoy and to make it back safely.

Mmmm I could taste the breeze going in my mouth and out through my nose. I taste the sea water that is flowing from down below but it still has reached my mouth and has melted inside like an ice cream melting in my hand in this hot weather. I can also taste the warm victory we will have because we have reached the end of the Mountain and I have reached my dream of coming to the end of a Mountain and see the wonderful view they have up here.

I can feel the huge rock that I am sitting on right now and it feels like a piece of metal on top of a beautiful hill that God created. I feel the Victory coming down on us so we can be victorious as anyone else. When I look at the view it makes me feel so thankful that God created this world for us to live in and a World that we can learn and see other people so we can make friends, that’s why I feel so thankful.

When I’m up here I hear birds tweeting and singing their whole heart away, I can also hear the tides from the sea coming closer and closer. The warm summer breeze is so peaceful and loud you can hear it and it’s so beautiful.

Conclusion

You should go to the top of a Mountain so you can see the view. You will be more relaxed. But sadly me and Jacob need to back home. But stay tuned for more adventurous!